Why can't I teleport people using TeleportService?

Will this work? If not what should I do?

local v = script.Parent.Parent
local PlaceID = v.Portal.ID.Value

function onTouched(hit)
    character = hit.Parent
        if character then
            game:GetService("TeleportService"):Teleport(PlaceID, character)
        end
end

script.Parent.Touched:connect(onTouched)

Here is my other script but if you can fix it then that would be great.

TeleDebounce1 = false

local LPlayer = game.Players.LocalPlayer
local BitsFrame = LPlayer.PlayerGui["_gui"]
local character = LPlayer.Character



for i,v in pairs(workspace.Portals:GetChildren()) do
v.Portal.Touched:connect(function(Who)
if Who.Parent:findFirstChild("Humanoid") and not TeleDebounce2 then
TeleDebounce2 = true
BitsFrame.Parent.TeleGui.Visible = true
--Begin Functions

local title = v.Portal.Title
local img = v.Portal.Img
local a = BitsFrame.Parent.TeleGui
a:TweenPosition(UDim2.new(0.5, -150, 0.5, -200), "Out", "Quad", 0.5)
a.Title.Text = title.Value
a.Img.Image = img.Value
BitsFrame.Parent.menuMusic:Pause()
BitsFrame.Parent.teleGui:Play()
wait(0.5)
BitsFrame.Parent.menuMusic:Play()
a:TweenPosition(UDim2.new(0, -300, 0.5, -200), "Out", "Quad", 0.5)
game:GetService("TeleportService"):Teleport(v.Portal.ID.Value, character)
--Close Gui
wait(0.5)
BitsFrame.Parent.TeleGui.Visible = false
TeleDebounce2 = false
end
end)
end