Script that is meant to enabled a local script is not working?

I don't think you can do that. I tried using RemoteEvents and it worked for me so I'm gonna tell you what to do. First, put a RemoteEvent in ReplicatedStorage, name it something like ShakeCamEvent or something. Then get a script and put it inside the part that you want to touch. Write this in it:

--Script

--Variables
local Shake = script.Parent
local ReplicatedStorage = game:GetService('ReplicatedStorage')
local ShakeCamEvent = ReplicatedStorage:WaitForChild('ShakeCamEvent')
--Code
Shake.Touched:Connect(function(hit) --When part is touched

	local player = game:GetService('Players'):GetPlayerFromCharacter(hit.Parent) --Getting player object in order to fire the client
	
	
	if player then -- if we get a player object
		
		ShakeCamEvent:FireClient(player) --fire client
		
	end
	
end)

Now that we have that, go into StarterPlayer > StarterCharacterScripts, and add a localscript

--LocalScript

--Variables
local ReplicatedStorage = game:GetService('ReplicatedStorage')
local CamShakeEvent = ReplicatedStorage:WaitForChild('ShakeCamEvent')
--Functions
local function onCamShake()
	
	--your camera shake code, sorry i can't write it, i dont really know how :|

end

--Code
CamShakeEvent.OnClientEvent:Connect(onCamShake)

That's it. I'm sorry if this does not work.